I don't mind listening to other people's takes on my story. ^^ It is an open game, so if you really want to make some dialogue changes you are welcome to make your own version of the game.
Cool. ^.^
Not to say I will. But if I was to do anything, it would be to make a short animation, using the story you made as a base, with some of my own small changes to it. As a form of fan fiction, of a fan fiction.
Been thinking about it a lot actually. Became oddly obsessed over this story of yours. I don't know why. O.O
But I lack the talent and time for such a project. However, if I did do such a thing, I'll be sure to let you know.
Neat. ^^ And I would say there is never such a thing as 'lacking' only more of such a thing of not having the knowledge yet. We learn and improve and get better as life is a learning process. If you are that interested, you can do it, even if there are struggles as you learn the ins and outs of working with Renpy and other programs. If you decide to do it, I wish you the best of luck for it.
I don't know Renpy.
The animation would be done in 3D with Blender. That would mean making and rigging 3D models. And creating the small world environment for the events to take place in. After, I would need sound, and some form of voice over.
It would be a project, one I be only a little familiar with.