This game kinda felt like being in an FBA video, which I guess is probably the point. The graphics are janky 3D, which is always a safe bet for this jam. The audio design I'm not sure about. I really, really liked the combination of ambient sounds and narration, but I don't know if it crosses the line into excessive, and I'm not sure it's so bad it's good.
The obstacle course did get pretty frustrating, but it's short enough that it's not the end of the world, and I did figure out that sprint works in the air and can be used to cheese it a bit. I think my only major complaint is that the ending is really abrupt. I'm not sure if something failed to trigger or if this is the way it's supposed to go, but I made it across the finish line, got narration to that effect, and then was left to wander.
I know it's done tongue-in-cheek, but I do feel the "it's YOUR journey being narrated" gimmick is going to be more immersive for people who use he/him pronouns. In general though I think this is a great first entry, although I know you guys were coming in with quite a bit of prior knowledge.