honestly, i know people who's only language is english and yet are quite... lacking, let's say. for a non-native speaker and a game in development, the writing is holding up just fine.
anyways, i got through runan (my beloved) and have compiled my findings in a google doc, which you can get to here. if you have trouble navigating the document, let me know! i'll update it whenever i get to the other (ridge is up next!) routes as well as backtrack to days 1-6. as a key thing, a lot of my comments are very nitpicky -- if a change doesn't make sense or does not fit the story, ignore it! i won't be hurt :)
again, i love the story and art in this game. perhaps i should get into monster hunter, but that's another time. you've got something awesome here and i'm excited for what you have cooking!