i really, really love this game. awesome stuff. can't wait for the full release.
that said, there are a few errors with the grammar. i think i saw somewhere that english isn't your first language, so i understand. but did you want some feedback on the errors, or someone to proofread it? sorry if this has already been mentioned!!
keep it up dude!!
Your English is fantastic! It's mostly minor things.
Just gonna list some here so that other people can chime in if they think I'm wrong:
- "Choose the character" might be considered a bit awkward; "Choose your character" is standard (but "the character" has a certain detached charm...so I'd argue you should leave it as is). Other options are "Choose character" or "Character select/ion". (edit: I noticed it says "Choose the location", so you can probably ignore me)
- "When you are about to die, you lose X percentage of skin finding instead" or "Lose X percentage of skin finding instead of dying" is more natural than the current version.
- I think there was something that said "Your aim have greatly improved", when it should be "has greatly improved".
I'll let you know if I find any more.
I had an amazing time playing the demo, I just sat down for 6 hours and did just about everything I could possible do save for using the special knife on the mirror. I wanted to let you know that in the Luna fight, two of the "you" in the secret code is actually spelt "yov". If this is intentional or I missed something that is fine too. :)
