Great work! Did you get inspired by the game Gris in terms of theme?
I only have a couple critiques. I feel like the development could go a little farther, and that the instruments could sound more human.
Development is like the biggest thing to think about with composing. It's subjective and infinite, but it also follows patterns.
Yes, This is my first piece ever after about a month of learning music theory, japanese music, piano, orchestration etc, and I'm I know a lot of "expression" is missing for now, everything is kind of the same velocity and stuff.
So I'm happy to get your feedback and am planning indeed on an updated version with more polish and adding 2 sections that are missing currently from my submission.
I think that's maybe what you're referring as development. These 2 missing sections (4 bars each) are supposed to transport the little girl into this new world before settling at the end like it is right now, with a lot of magical and optimistic sounds, one last grandiose part that was not included due to lack of time and my inability to work fast for now xD
I'm hopeful this will help the piece feel more complete, would love your feedback once that's done!
Thank you so much for taking the time to listen and comment!
I completely forgot to answer, I have never played Gris other than see the pretty pictures. Is the theme similar? If so I need to play it ASAP, coz it's a theme that is super close to me. I suffer quite a lot daily with object permanence, and more philosophically, impermanence has always been something kind of worrying. So I don't know, I just saw that theme jump out of the picture all of a sudden and went with it lol
