Yes, This is my first piece ever after about a month of learning music theory, japanese music, piano, orchestration etc, and I'm I know a lot of "expression" is missing for now, everything is kind of the same velocity and stuff.
So I'm happy to get your feedback and am planning indeed on an updated version with more polish and adding 2 sections that are missing currently from my submission.
I think that's maybe what you're referring as development. These 2 missing sections (4 bars each) are supposed to transport the little girl into this new world before settling at the end like it is right now, with a lot of magical and optimistic sounds, one last grandiose part that was not included due to lack of time and my inability to work fast for now xD
I'm hopeful this will help the piece feel more complete, would love your feedback once that's done!
Thank you so much for taking the time to listen and comment!