A good entry with a good story behind it. I spotted one typo but it didn't take away from the story itself. One thing though, I think it's a bit of a stretch in terms of adherence to the theme, but you score high for the story. Well done!
I'm still working on how to deliver themes subtly but meaningfully. I hated how on the nose my last entry was so I may have over compensated here. Thanks for the feedback!
