I feel like you have a great start, and some really talent. It just needed a little more time in the oven. You had decent descriptions, but it felt a little jumpy. Instead of just flowing I feel it went fast, slow, fast slow, even in the action. One thing that I feel held it back was I never felt worried for the MC. It didn't go as planned but I never felt she was in danger. She was also too fast or pulling another gadget out of her bag so to say. I did enjoy the story, and the Saturday morning cartoon ending made me smile. Please keep writing as I think you have talent.