Thanks for the feedback! Which bits did you find hard to follow?
Haha, yes the eruption of the beacon was fun to write, I pretty much just stole the Idol scene from Raiders of the lost arc and mixed it with Pippin dropping the bucket down the well in Moria, only difference is Eternal Wardens don't run away.
Viewing post in Wardens in the Mist jam comments
I kept having to go back and check which Warden was who. For example when one of them stood with their greatsword out I liked that imagery, then two more readied warhammers. Then a fourth (that I had forgotten about) swung his warhammer in combat but because I went from the warhammers and the fourth didn't have their names my first thought was "wait, didn't he have a sword?" So I had to skip back to confirm names and numbers.
It's possible that I didn't pick up enough on the unique aspects of each character which is why I struggled. On its own I wouldn't worry too much about what I'm saying, get a broader perspective.
If most people follow just fine then the issue is with me and not your writing ;)
Nah these are great points. I recall going through the Eternal Wardens' list and finding the great sword upgrade (Malek's weapon) and then saw that the remaining two could have dual warhammers. In retrospect I probably should have made more definition between the characters and given Aleric, who is supposed to be an Eternal Lord, a more unique weapon too.
There's definitely something to be said for the way two warhammers look great on a mini, but sound ridiculous in prose.
Nah, I'm happy with the warhammers in general. It takes a lot to throw off my suspension of belief. I honestly loved the greatsword inclusion too. The atmosphere was good, there were good interactions between the Wardens. I could genuinely see they were a close-knit unit. Loved how the seeing stone completely backfired too, I'm a fan of situations where characters are like "ok, let's get out quietly...........balls." and you really delivered there.