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Cheers, that's really kind of you to say. I've always enjoyed writing fantasy over sci-fi.

Really great writing. Your dialogue was enjoyable to read which is no small feat.

Nah these are great points. I recall going through the Eternal Wardens' list and finding the great sword upgrade (Malek's weapon) and then saw that the remaining two could have dual warhammers. In retrospect I probably should have made more definition between the characters and given Aleric, who is supposed to be an Eternal Lord, a more unique weapon too.

There's definitely something to be said for the way two warhammers look great on a mini, but sound ridiculous in prose.

Thanks for the feedback, that's kind of you to say.

Thanks for the feedback! Which bits did you find hard to follow?

Haha, yes the eruption of the beacon was fun to write, I pretty much just stole the Idol scene from Raiders of the lost arc and mixed it with Pippin dropping the bucket down the well in Moria, only difference is Eternal Wardens don't run away.

Thanks for the feedback! You're absolutely right about the tight real estate of 1000 words. There's no doubt my story is quite pulpy; I wanted to get some epic fantasy in there hence the series of fast moving scenes and variety of setting. The ending is absolutely abrupt and intentionally ambiguous. I think 1000 words is far too little space to have your character sitting around navel gazing, especially when there's such a tight limit to how well the reader can really get to know the characters.