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I feel like this story could have benefited from a few more paragraph breaks. There were long blocks of ethereal text that were setting up the story, not really driving it forward. I was only really engaged on the final battle, but that, itself, was excellent. The mental image of this infected humanoid blocking giant razor claw strikes was interesting but I loved the grotesqueness of this match up.

Thanks for the feedback, I can think of now tightening it up in a few ways to lower the exposition level for sure.

Honestly, my complaint only applies to the idea that these are short form stories. Given a more drawn out format where the writing can afford to be more dramatic and poetic, it would have read great, hope you don't ditch the style entirely =)

not at all, the length parameters are definitely limiting (in a good way) and your comments are both appreciated and valid - I would only hope that with more time/editing and space it could be polished to be more enjoyable, so the critique is very welcome