Another strong entry - you used the timer well as a plot device to punctuate the story and provide natural scene breaks! I only wish you'd had the space to finish the countdown - I can't help but feel that I just read the first 1000 words of a 1500-word story and I didn't leave it with a sense of resolution. It's still an enjoyable story, though, and your voice is crisp and clear as ever.
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Thanks! Yeah, I'm not particularly satisfied with the ending (or lack thereof) either. I was a bit overambitious with the scene concept and didn't have the time or motivation to completely restructure it after I realized I wouldn't have the space I needed, so it was reworked into a cliffhanger. The team didn't have enough time to complete their mission, and I didn't have enough words :P