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Amazing art and premise! You pack a lot of personality into your characters with just a short line or two!

If I have one critique (attempting constructive criticism haha) I found it hard to follow who was who. There's a lot of characters here, which is awesome! All that drama and texture is baked in, but if we didn't have such a tight page constraint, I would have loved a full section to explain who all the NPC's are before we meet them. It was hard to remember where we learn about each person, and then they get referenced pretty freely after the first reference. Maybe that's just a me problem, been reading jams all day haha. It also might be easier to scan the page for NPCs if their descriptors would listed after their name, instead of the other way around. (i.e. Silverear, Narcissist flesh thing. Instead of Narcissist flesh thing, Silverear. I thought his name was Narcissist Flesh Thing for a while haha, again maybe just a me problem).

Overall I can't believe how much content you managed in such a small package! Your art really sings, and I can't wait to see more! Followed!

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Thank you! Im waiting with changing anything until after the jam, but all your criticsism have already been voiced in my head and will be edited. If evough people show interest, i think im gonna bump it up to 20 or 24 pages after the jam! (Maybe more? Who knows!)

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Do it! You clearly have enough fun ideas to fill up more pages :)

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yeah , i had to scrap so much art to fit the dungeon but a spider hunting you in a tower just doesnt feel the same, does it? I loved your paper doll idea by the way! It's definitely among the classiest entries!

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