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I liked it. The writing style is good, the fox is cute, and thank goodness he's not a bara muscular man, the sight of which makes me sick. IMHO. As someone already said, you need to correct the scale. Still, the thing that caught my eye the most is that the fox's head, in some moments, is disproportionate to his body, it seems too big. And the legs sometimes seem too thin. Maybe a less realistic visual style of AI model would look better, but maybe not.

The music is nice, just in the theme of the atmosphere of the game.

Special thanks for the animalistic style of the fox, (Paws, claws, etc.). Hopefully the contents of the his pants will also be different from human)

I don't understand the hatred towards AI. It's the same imaging tool as a painter's brush, and just like a brush, AI needs to be mastered to create good art or animation.

Besides, there are a lot of visual novels on this site with frankly ugly artwork, but they are praised only because they are hand drawn, it hurts me personally to look at such, I would rather look at AI art than scribbles of kindergarten level.

I wish you good luck in creating this VN, and will wait for new updates.

Btw, what kinds of anthropomorphic animal characters will be in the game? Some cute lynxes won't appear in it by any chance?)))

The Red Levity53 days ago(+2)(-2)

I'm not into those excessive muscles either :D I think it's fair if that's what the author wants to see, but I admit it also puts me off those stories. The scale - are we talking in the prologue (before they start walking together), I can certainly see that. It has been a challenge doing this with AI. Probably a lot more difficult than people think it is.

I'm currently making corrections to the writing. There are a lot of mistakes... typos spelling mistakes, grammar. I'm also considering rewriting the prologue, but this is a maybe. If I do, I will be correcting those scale issues that are present there.

Maybe a less realistic visual style of AI model would look better, but maybe not.

- It's a difficult problem. Some of these issues will be quirks that would require an amount of technical work detrimental to the process, as most of my time would be spent trying to sew together body parts in Photoshop. And honestly, if I chose that route, I'm not sure I even can.

The music is nice, just in the theme of the atmosphere of the game.

I'm glad you liked it :)

Special thanks for the animalistic style of the fox, (Paws, claws, etc.). Hopefully the contents of the his pants will also be different from human)
- Can confirm he is not like us under those skinny jeans.

I don't understand the hatred towards AI. It's the same imaging tool as a painter's brush, and just like a brush, AI needs to be mastered to create good art or animation.

- I try to understand it. My mother is a painter. It takes her weeks or sometimes months to finish a painting. I can see visual artists being disheartened by this. We simply have to maintain what value real human art has and try to view AI as human evolution, rather than competition. IMO it should not be seen as a replacement, but another genre. What I don't respect is blind anger and negativity.

I wish you good luck in creating this VN, and will wait for new updates. Btw, what kinds of anthropomorphic animal characters will be in the game? Some cute lynxes won't appear in it by any chance?)))

- I can't say, but lynxes are very cute, I agree :) I appreciate your kind words a lot. Since releasing this, I have had a bit of a culture shock. Even to the extent that I have been undecided about whether to even continue the project here. In that case, I would just make it privately.

So I appreciate it.

Whurlak53 days ago(+1)

I think you need to smooth out the edges of this project. Make the demo of this game a little better, fix the mistakes, and then write a couple chapters of the story. After that, publish a new demo.

Regarding the story. I would advise you to write a backstory of the characters, at least the backstory of the MC at the beginning. Where he's from, who he is, where he's going, etc. At least briefly. Because right now it looks like two strangers met and went somewhere for unknown reasons, -Why? - Just because...

Let's say the protagonist can share his live story with Fox as they walk down the road. The fox might say something brief about himself in return.

From my point of view it is important that at least something about the main character is known at the beginning of the game, otherwise it feels like a gap.

You can write this VN, you did well for a start, don't give up)

The Red Levity51 days ago(+1)

I think you need to smooth out the edges of this project. Make the demo of this game a little better, fix the mistakes, and then write a couple chapters of the story. After that, publish a new demo.

- This is what I am doing atm. I am learning as I go, and trying to be as humble about the process as possible.

Let's say the protagonist can share his live story with Fox as they walk down the road. The fox might say something brief about himself in return.

From my point of view it is important that at least something about the main character is known at the beginning of the game, otherwise it feels like a gap.

- I understand this critique. It's very valid. It may seem strange, but it was actually a conscious choice. Sure, some of the dialogue simply isn't realistic enough, and I will work on that. I was working under the assumption that the MC should fit the reader, and since I don't know the reader, I cannot assume too much about them. In doing so, I swung into another cul-de-sac - having a MC who is bland and one-dimensional.

You can write this VN, you did well for a start, don't give up)

- It may be a while before the next chapter, and rework of what's already here, but I'm working on things, thank you :)

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