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*Because I'm really tired seeing more and more ignorant and illiterate "writers" trying to do something not only without understanding basic rules of storytellling*

Don't have to know the basic rules of storytellling to write a good and interesting story. I don't understand idiots who look more at grammar and other crap instead of the content of the game itself. Besides, every writer has their own style.

You learn from mistakes, how else can you start creating something if you don't try? 

I think you need to smooth out the edges of this project. Make the demo of this game a little better, fix the mistakes, and then write a couple chapters of the story. After that, publish a new demo.

Regarding the story. I would advise you to write a backstory of the characters, at least the backstory of the MC at the beginning. Where he's from, who he is, where he's going, etc. At least briefly. Because right now it looks like two strangers met and went somewhere for unknown reasons, -Why? - Just because...

Let's say the protagonist can share his live story with Fox as they walk down the road. The fox might say something brief about himself in return. 

From my point of view it is important that at least something about the main character is known at the beginning of the game, otherwise it feels like a gap.

You can write this VN, you did well for a start, don't give up)

I liked it. The writing style is good, the fox is cute, and thank goodness he's not a bara muscular man, the sight of which makes me sick. IMHO. As someone already said, you need to correct the scale. Still, the thing that caught my eye the most is that the fox's head, in some moments, is disproportionate to his body, it seems too big. And the legs sometimes seem too thin. Maybe a less realistic visual style of AI model would look better, but maybe not.

The music is nice, just in the theme of the atmosphere of the game. 

Special thanks for the animalistic style of the fox, (Paws, claws, etc.). Hopefully the contents of the his pants will also be different from human)

I don't understand the hatred towards AI. It's the same imaging tool as a painter's brush, and just like a brush, AI needs to be mastered to create good art or animation.

Besides, there are a lot of visual novels on this site with frankly ugly artwork, but they are praised only because they are hand drawn, it hurts me personally to look at such, I would rather look at AI art than scribbles of kindergarten level.

I wish you good luck in creating this VN, and will wait for new updates.

Btw, what kinds of anthropomorphic animal characters will be in the game? Some cute lynxes won't appear in it by any chance?)))

I can't believe it, Alon, finally, thank you, thank you, thank you, Awoo!)

Will feline characters be added besides the lion? I would really like to see lynxes)

For a prototype, it's a very good game. Add more story, romances, and it will be even better.

Spoilers...

Dave, for some reason, really wants to be a hero and save the world. The definition of the word *Hero* is someone who gets other people killed. Here's the result. The main character should have negotiated with the snow leopard instead of mindlessly swinging his sword around like a moron. Or at least start thinking with his head instead of his ass. (IMHO)

But the talk was about Alex, so whatever happens, I'll keep waiting for that cute lynx.

P.s. You'd better mark your post as a spoiler.

Urrrgh, Alex, I miss you. Hope I see you again this year.

Thanks a lot! You are a life saver. (Homecoming-Morenatsu-Revisited-Release_2) - It still has Kouya's sprites, and the archive itself has the Shun sprites I was looking for. Thanks again.

Btw, will there be an android version?

I left a link to the guide somewhere below.

Of course, if you're not afraid of evil lynx hackers, who want to hack your computer...

Love drawing style and story, creates a special atmosphere of mystery. It's nice to see a new work from a familiar author. Best of luck, I really like your VN's.

I played this version a long time ago, if my hard drive hadn't burned up it would still be there. But yeah, I don't think I can find it anywhere, damn.

Can anyone tell me where I can find the old version with these sprites?

...cough-cough...*...E621...*...cough-cough...)))

You need to use a browser extension - (mindmup 2.0 for google drive). Download my file to google drive, and open it with the program. You can see how to use mindmup in any youtube tutorial, it's very easy.

Yes, the color determines the end of the character's rout and the opening of certain arts in the gallery.

Since someone is having trouble opening the gallery, I made a "little" guide on how to open everything and get some endings. I hope the author of the game does not mind.

You can simply view the map with the extension (mindmup 2.0 for google drive). Download this file to google drive, install the extension and open the map, everything is simple.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/13g3IrxfkbFdUgCzQfJJheAs95We0J-bs/view?usp=shari...

It's essentially a skeleton of the game with choices that allow you to unlock arts for each route.

I was just joking. Besides, I like being a hopeless slut in games, he-he)

By your logic, I'm a hopeless slut. After all, not only have I read all the other routes, I've also read a bunch of other furry novels where I also have a husbando:)

Since someone is having trouble opening the gallery, I made a "little" guide on how to open everything and get some endings. I hope the author of the game does not mind.

You can simply view the map with the extension (mindmup 2.0 for google drive). Download this file to google drive, install the extension and open the map, everything is simple.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/13g3IrxfkbFdUgCzQfJJheAs95We0J-bs/view?usp=shari...

It's essentially a skeleton of the game with choices that allow you to unlock arts for each route.

Android version?

I'm sure someone has already asked, but the corrected and expanded Aiden's rout will come out after three parts with Scribbles?

Thanks for letting me know, I was also hoping for Chris, but that probably won't be happened.

Oh, thank you. I was hoping that maybe the developers would respond, but perhaps even they don't know:)

Wow, why haven't I seen this novel before? I really liked it, especially Rohan, thank you, and good luck with the development.

Can someone clearly say whose routes will be available in the game in the future, except for the main three? Chris, as I understand, was canceled, Russell was replaced by Kane, or what?

I haven't read this VN for a long time, and the comments contradict each other...

Tnx.

Thanks for the addition with Evan and Snake, it's wonderful. Really love this couple. I hope in future games you will pay more attention to the cuteness than bara. There are already a lot of muscle themes in furry games, as for me. (IMHO)

Please, tell me that this game is still alive... 

I really liked it.

Happy birthday Conway! Good luck to the developers.

Oh, I see, thanks for the reply and good luck with the development)

Good writing and storytelling style, even though English is not my native language. Conveys the cold, hostile atmosphere of the outside world, as well as hints at the gloomy inner feelings of the main protagonist. Thanks, I haven't read this kind of novel for a long time, I will wait for the continuation of the story.

Btw, why didn't you choose the Ren'Py engine to create the game? Just wondering, for myself.

The worst part, as for me. Human giant dicks, similar to sausage, look ridiculous and stupid, causing nothing but laughter. Blake and Percy are the only ones saving the game.

Well I agree with the comment above. Tate surprised me. I've been waiting for him for so long, and he turned out to be a candy with a bitter filling.

He literally left Cody to die. The very act of not trying to do anything at all already says a lot about him.

At least he could have told someone about what happened after the incident, but he just decided to keep quiet. - Well, someone died, so what, little things, right? Or almost died.

Besides, he could teleport to the academy, even if he could not speak, but simply fell unconscious, this would already serve as a signal to others that something bad had happened.

Tate's route, trying to bring us closer to him, but I, on the contrary, felt myself moving further away from him. Eventually, I found solace in route with Oliver and cute lynx from the village, it's a shame that there will be no continuation of it.

Of course, respect from me to the author, for such a great big update with many arts. 

Can Perya be romanced? Does he have a route?

Great game, by the way, thanks.

Ah, shame, but I'm happy for him. Well, I don't really like bara, but good luck in developing your game)

Will there be a possibility of romance with other characters, especially with the doctor/snow leopard?

Great novel, keep up the good work.

I have a question - will Maros appear further in the game? Will be the route with him?

Pfft, - I bet that in a couple of days someone will ask again when the update will be released.)

For some, they are too lazy to read too many letters, not to mention to go to the author's Twitter. It's easier to ask, right?)

I think if someone asked me every few days when there would be an update, I would bite off a piece of my monitor out of anger.)

I wish the author patience.

By the way - when is the next update?))

That is sad. Even if bara is not in my interests, but I still wish you good luck in developing your VN.