Interesting story you've added :). The whole composition feels full and sounds great. Just when I wanted to suggest to change things up a bit from the same chord progression and instruments, you introduced 2:08 to me. It felt different but not wrong to me. Now, I am personally a BIG FAN of songs in 5/4, and I have made more songs in 5/4 than I dare to admit, and many of those songs sound weird to the common ear. To me, this part sounded just fine! But I can't judge for the common listener, as I've grown common to hearing songs in 5/4. I do love that you venture outside of the commonly accepted musical space. Your 'creativity' level also went up immediately :). Great song, well done!
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Thank you and sorry the reply is a little late! I am glad you find the story interesting, I originally had something more in-depth in mind planned but I was afraid of potentially over-complicating things, it was a concept that had some mix of ideas from Majora's Mask and Final Fantasy. I am glad you like the change to 5/4 as well! I've had lots of difficulty implementing certain aspects like drum rhythms into 5/4 sometimes so it is nice to hear the whole thing turns out well! It's cool to hear you make songs in 5/4 as well, it's always a fun area to compose in!