good story. I really find the first person POV hard to write but you seem to have done it pretty well. I enjoy the stream of conscience vibes going on. It makes it flow pretty well. It ended early unfortunately.
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Thank you for your feedback and positive and kind words I really appreciate. I could continue and expand the story, but because there was a time and word count limit, I ended things there. That's why there's two version. Shorter for contest and extended with additional dialog and background more story background. It's a bonus from me, since I enjoyed writing this particular story. :)