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First of all, thank you for not uploading the mood board haha. This was a great little tale, well done, I don't really have many actual criticisms apart from a few lines where maybe you repeat what the reader just put together. Personally, I didn't like the ending, I would have liked to see the gunner be just as caught of guard by something as the pilot was by the competence of the gunner- so she doesn't start AND end the story bored. (Maybe the pilot's experience that intel is always wrong inspired him to keep one more trick up his sleeve? Again, personal taste) Well done, regardless. Fun, if short, encounter! Edit: I especially liked the line ~the crew was as ramshackle as the ship~ That was strong enough in and of itself that you could have cut alot of other lines!

Thanks. i will keep that little tidbit about the crew description in mind moving forward with other written works. Sometimes I have moments of absolute brilliance- slathered in predominantly “bleh” presentation. :)

Hey translating that high from your mind to the reader's is the whole art =)