Wow, what a good story and characters! It all flowed pretty well except for when going from one place to next and talking for too long. I think adding nice little music in the background can help as well as increasing character speed, and with the text where it starts typing on the first line then jumps to the next because the words too big to fit on it, try adding "\n" for line breaks so it automatically starts the next line. Great story and it was a nice and weird change with the time baby! A lot of decent stuff done in a week!