Good effort here liked the general gist in the short space but had a few problems. Your paragraphs are too long. One idea one paragraph. Why did Gabino mutter? Did he not think she was paying attention? Does he often talk to himself? Is the elf gender neutral and that is why you were using the plural pronouns? If they know nothing about the elf then not even their name then they would name the character The Elf not lower case.
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I used the word mutter just because Gabino is speaking in a low voice (he's standing right over Eskiera, and is rather tired himself). I could've used 'whisper' but that would imply he's hiding something, which is not the case. The word 'sigh' would've worked, but I already used it in another part of the text.
The humans know the elf as 'Shrike', although they suspect it's a fake name. Shrike may or may not conform to (human) gender norms, but mostly it's just another aspect of their identity the humans are not aware of. So they refer to Shrike with singular they pronouns for lack of another option.
I'll look into the paragraphs! This is my forst time writing in this format.