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Loved that you could see a much deeper story in the background but was not at all necessary to enjoy this story.

Loved the story just remember the Alliance are traitors that need to be eradicated. Long Live the Empire.

Good effort here liked the general gist in the short space but had a few problems. Your paragraphs are too long. One idea one paragraph. Why did Gabino mutter? Did he not think she was paying attention? Does he often talk to himself? Is the elf gender neutral and that is why you were using the plural pronouns? If they know nothing about the elf then not even their name then they would name the character The Elf not lower case.