This is a cool idea, and I'd love to see it expanded more in the future.
One big issue I had was with the UI. Often, vital info ran off the edge of my screen. I don't know if my story was good or not in the end, because after a few lines it ran off the screen. I also had issues with text appearing for a split second and then vanishing before it could be read. Another issue was with the lack of possible combinations.
This is a promising start though, and I'd love to see more of it in the future. Maybe even some randomized elements with the locations, for replay variety?