I'm really enjoying the story so far, and most of the characters are fleshed out and fun. My only real issue is the unbelievably bad English.
I really mean no disrespect, especially if English is not the writers first language, and I understand that grammatical and spelling issues is part of a ongoing project like this, but it ranges from bad to actually unreadable.
I would use the corrections form to report it, however, it's literally in every scene. It honestly reads like it's been translated through something like Google Translate.
If English is your target market, I would really recommend having your script proofread and edited.