I think the level design shines in this project. Lots of hidden things to pick up in nooks and crannies and signs that tell you which way to go and keep the flow of the game moving. Unfortunately the camera jitter on the jump made the game hard to play as the quick motion was making me nauseas. I think If the camera would move a little smoother on the jump it would alleviate this. Also, during the narrative parts, it would be nice to have character portraits when certain characters are mentioned. It was hard keeping who's who straight.
This game has a solid foundation, just needs some polish and I think you could have something fun.