I enjoyed the story quite a bit, and I think you did a really nice job on this. My biggest gripe is in the formatting, I think the font could have been decreased to make it all fit on one page and for readability. But all in all, I enjoyed this.
thank you! editing was a bit of a pain (taking it from paper to Word and formatting the thing was... interesting) so I did not even think about shrinking the font till this was posted, so sorry 'bout that
