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This one is an interesting read indeed!  There’s a lot going on here to dissect - two themes I immediately noticed:

  • A sense of diminishment (large bells to small bells to silence, the formatting of the protagonist's thoughts) that presents itself through the story.
  • The experience of the protagonist and how they correlate to events in her life

Both of these themes encouraged me to read through again to understand how they connected to the overall narrative you constructed

Your writing style is distinct, which provided a sense of poetry while reading.  I believe I was able to follow the overall story being told.  In portions, I think it also made the narrative a bit tougher to read at times with dense sentence structure, some run-on sentences, and unconventional formatting.  I think you can maintain this unique writing style while improving readability.

--Minor Spoilers for Story--

I am unsure of the unconventional weapon.  Is it the meteorite strike?  Destroying a waste plant to affect the surrounding area?  The unconventional weapon seemed to be a vehicle to write about the protagonist’s experience.  It was a great read, but it seemed like a means to an end instead of core to the story.  I actually think this would have been a great submission for the last writing jam, "Reflections".

-- End Spoilers--

I enjoyed reading this story.  Thank you for writing it for this jam!

Glad you liked it! And yes, you got the underlying tones just right :)

I agree that the whole text could still be improved, I would have to leave it in a drawer for a week or two to have a "fresh" look at it later and see if some passages, as you say, were harder to read than others.

Re: the story - I would like to leave the interpretations to the readers for now (until the ratings and comments are completed) and afterwards I can add my own view on that if you are interested! I intentionally did not include "obvious" answers to some details, I can explain later.

Also - have to read other posts still (so far managed to review and rate 9 of all the bunch) and yours is one of the next ones - looking forward to it!

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Sounds like I need to read it again once or twice to help cement my interpretation of what I think happened!  It was good work, one that I think I'll enjoy going back to in order to think through a bit more.