This one is an interesting read indeed! There’s a lot going on here to dissect - two themes I immediately noticed:
- A sense of diminishment (large bells to small bells to silence, the formatting of the protagonist's thoughts) that presents itself through the story.
- The experience of the protagonist and how they correlate to events in her life
Both of these themes encouraged me to read through again to understand how they connected to the overall narrative you constructed
Your writing style is distinct, which provided a sense of poetry while reading. I believe I was able to follow the overall story being told. In portions, I think it also made the narrative a bit tougher to read at times with dense sentence structure, some run-on sentences, and unconventional formatting. I think you can maintain this unique writing style while improving readability.
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I am unsure of the unconventional weapon. Is it the meteorite strike? Destroying a waste plant to affect the surrounding area? The unconventional weapon seemed to be a vehicle to write about the protagonist’s experience. It was a great read, but it seemed like a means to an end instead of core to the story. I actually think this would have been a great submission for the last writing jam, "Reflections".
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I enjoyed reading this story. Thank you for writing it for this jam!