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Glad you liked it! And yes, you got the underlying tones just right :)

I agree that the whole text could still be improved, I would have to leave it in a drawer for a week or two to have a "fresh" look at it later and see if some passages, as you say, were harder to read than others.

Re: the story - I would like to leave the interpretations to the readers for now (until the ratings and comments are completed) and afterwards I can add my own view on that if you are interested! I intentionally did not include "obvious" answers to some details, I can explain later.

Also - have to read other posts still (so far managed to review and rate 9 of all the bunch) and yours is one of the next ones - looking forward to it!

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Sounds like I need to read it again once or twice to help cement my interpretation of what I think happened!  It was good work, one that I think I'll enjoy going back to in order to think through a bit more.