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A nicely written reflective piece on the nature of weapons and combat. I did notice some grammar issues (beginnings of sentences not capitalized, questions ending in periods) and in particular, you should begin a new paragraph whenever the speaker changes. I appreciated how understated everything was: the titular parable made its point delicately but clearly, without being overly forced or contrived - exactly the sort of thing a good teacher might actually use as an illustration, especially one about thinking clearly. I was left curious about how Arasen has come to be learning meditation - he's an unusual Jackal, clearly, and I understand you've got a word count to adhere to, but a hint in that direction would have been good. (And on a second read, I was assuming Master Jow-Kai was a Jackal himself, but the text doesn't actually state this. Is he supposed to be TAO?)

(Also, was it Jackal month and no-one told me? That's at least the third story I've read where the Jackals play a major role.)

thank you for commenting! (i know, not including mine there's at least 3-4 other story's with jackals)

thanks for the feed back, ill keep it in mind.  and no, Jow-Kai is a (old) master from the Eternal Dynasty, my entry for OPR jam#4, A Question of Peace was about him. I've wanted to write more about him for a while and planned on giving him a new apprentice. and than the jackal faction was released, which i love, and since there kind of supposed to be like the kroot, i imagined them (well, Arasens tribe at least) to be like the Mongols or Huns, and so decided to introduce Arasen  

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Oooh that explains it; thank you for clarifying.

no problem :)