I like the efford you put into designing the pamphlet and the maps (were they traditionally painted on paper? That's amazing), but I found it difficult to understand what the adventure was about. I think a general explanation in the beginning, contextualizing the situation, clearly stating the problem and the resolution would be perfect to help guide any reader, even if they're unfamiliar with the system. And if it's good for such readers, then it'll be good for those who know the system as well.
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The map is indeed a watercolor painting I made and scanned, ^^
I am a bit confused, however, about what you found hard to understand with regard to the situation, problem, and goals (resolution). The situation and problem are along the banner of the pamphlet, and the title states the two potential goals: Evac the Exec, or Snag the Suit. The players choose which job to take, either evacuating Ori Moineaux, the executive, or snag (i.e. kidnap) the man while the station is in chaos.
Thanks for the feedback, these jams are always good to dig into the misunderstandings people have with an adventure. All about helping each other improve, so please feel free to dig into specifics!