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It’s a hard balance to make between explaining too much and explaining not enough. This build in particular had to set up a lot of things that won’t pay off until later, so things might make more sense in context later. I should probably also make another edit on this build and try to be more explicit in a few places. I’m sure you’re not the only person with this experience.
Thanks.
As I mentioned in the devlog, there will be a lore appendix at some point, but I think it would be better if the vn was self-contained and didn’t require outside reading.
I'm kind of the opposite with this, the fact that the story references a lot of lore without fully explaining it makes it more engaging for me, as it allows the reader to try and guess what it all means. my current theory is that each of the magic types is correlated to one of the four basic elements and their general philosophies. Grace would be water type spells, it's described to be gentle and it seems that it helps plants to grow; Fury would be fire, it seems it's an aggressive kind of magic, Gravity seems to be earth based and my understanding is that it's used for weight manipulation and plowing fields, Memory would be air based, the only hint being the mention of the elephants atuned to this magic being stargazers. Also they are all color coded, grace being blue and fury being red makes the correlation to water and fire pretty easy, gravity being yellow and memory being grey are a bit more confusing, and gravity as a word could easily correlate to air instead, but i figured the abstractness of memory would fit air much better than earth.
I do understand what you meant. I was just voicing out my own preferences on the matter. I find that characters with well stablished pasts i'm not immediately privy to are leagues more fascinating than your usual blank slate protagonist, which is generally a clutch for storytelling to excuse info dumps. This is done so many times, and those characters often turn out way too ignorant or naive, thus i revel when a narritive actually challenges my own intellect as a reader. I do think that i'm of a minority in this regard though, as i see a lot more people who dig in the self insert protag cause it helps them relate to the story. It's just that doesn't work well with me, these self inserts feel more like non-characters as they have little to no remarkable traits. At the end of the day it's all a matter of preference.
also i just felt like trying to theorize about the magic system out here, you seemed interested in the topic at the very least.