Grimdark will do that LOL, as for clarity it was generally very good (translating is always inexact) and easy to follow. With online resources such as Grammarly or similar tools you might consider for any tightening you think you need.
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Thank you, and thanks for the tip. I didn't know what "tightening" meant regarding text, but I've looked into it and get what you mean. In German, I tend to overly complicate descriptions because it kinda sounds stale otherwise, English has a lot more short and interesting adjectives, I'll try to keep that in mind next time.