Will obviously need more sprites for expressions. I don't understand how the apron could be lewd, aside from "kiss the paw", but I find that cute? it makes the dialogue at this part WAY too harsh out of the blue. But of course I end up picking George, Wolves are my biggest weakness after all... (I'm so cliché with this XD). Owch being way to harsh on him for no reason! Yeah... need to explain more of the backstory first, especially if the characters already know each other, don't keep things at face value unless they have only just met. All around the interactions just seem lame because of these things, it feels off and unnatural. Need more descriptions of what hey se, think, and do. This includes their surroundings, and not just the characters. No coordination or teamwork??? Not even any details on the game or them talking during play? This is getting bland faster than breakfast! Yeah no this has gotten to the point of beyond stupid... no logic or emotion, no feeling. The drama is way too forced that it misses the mark by a mile. *sigh* There is a lot you need to rewrite/edit/add...
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I see. Thank you for this comment. I'll take note of this. I will add or delete a few dialogues just to make it clearer. Expect more dramas, mystery, love, and terrifying scenes in this story. It'll be interesting in the future updates since we're still at chapter 1. You'll see more backstories on why George have that personality. And also, I just find the kiss the paw apron lewd. I mean, they are furries and asking to kiss the paw is like a proposal to marry him. Anyway, I will revise it because it seems inappropriate.
Don't feel the need to revise the Apron part, I can understand the reasons you find it lewd, but just want to point out that its based on an Italian thing where they make physical contact with friends and family like that, a kiss on the cheek or the hand, its an old time gentleman thing. It not something I actually expect someone to do, but the idea is for hello, goodbye, and thanks gestures.