Yea, maybe I have degenerated too far to enjoy this writing. I mean if you are aiming for your visual novel to be a conflict free fairytale wonderland, then the writing fits I guess. Emelie being a princess, I'd expect her to sometimes show few spoiled bitch personality traits. Like in the beach scene when she shows up, instead of:
emelie "Are you sure this bikini is the right size?"
emelie "Thats what I get for not buying it myself."
emelie "So my breast did grow."
Something more bitchy like:
emelie "[MC]! You just had to buy the skimpiest bikini you could find right?!"
emelie "Its not even the right size, its so tight its making my breast spill out from all sides!"
MC "Sorry piglet, but you know its really hot today, and I love a well tied roast."
emelie rolls eyes "Did you forget that I am still a PRINCESS?? I look like the town whore in this."
MC "Nah, if anyone is the town whore its Maple."
*Maple catwalks into scene*
maple "Heyyy guys, I heard my naaame. Were you talking about me?"
maple "Huh!? Oh my ghod [MC], that G-string looks so hot on your.... gf?"
maple sticks her boobs out "How do you like my slingshot monokini though?"
*Maple turns around presenting her ass*
*MC pops a boner, Emelie notices and is visibly annoyed*
MC "Yeahh, it sure is... something atleast."
maple "Don't you think its covering too much? I actually wanted to wear pasties but I couldnt find any water-proof ones."
*MC reflexively bends over in pain as a vein on his penis nearly pops from a blood pressure spike*