Now this is my kind of weird. The whole thing really gives the sense that I've been thrown into something much larger than me that I barely understand, and I'm expected to just roll with it. It was disorienting, bizarre, and awesome. I really loved the ending where you made peace.
Obviously the whole thing could use a bit more polish, especially to make it stand out from other Twine games. I imagine time played a role in not doing more there, especially since it seems like you really focused on doing quite a bit of writing instead of changing up styles.
And sometimes the large blocks of text were off-putting. If planning on continuing work on this, maybe break them up with some other choices, even something simple like a "Go on" would help. A big bunch of text can be scary, even to the most avid reader!
Overall though, I freaking love this. Super weird.