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Streamed this for 1.5 hour got to the cliff hanger on deciding between the poor Cecil and Fredrick on who to lock while seriously suspecting a third option. I will feature the game as stand alone on my YT later. 

I agree with The last secret that I wasn't very sure if I was a male or female in the beginning until I see my name later, (I got lost on what kind of voice I need to find as well as a streamer) 

I also agree that BG styles would look better if it's done differently, AI art can be considered as long as you want to keep the game free and not commercial so you don't run into any legal issues. 

I think the story was intriguing for me to want to know who killed the professor, but there is an issue as that I completely have NO IDEA who the victim is and I can't picture his importance and relevance unless it's through other characters and his title, then my motivation would be to save myself or maybe the princess from any suspicion but the game didn't reach to that direction which would be more emotionally engaging, it's a mere suggestion but if we can see the professor in an inserted party scene before it all happens it will help a lot story wise for the player, and if not too costly, a way to put the player in more danger so it's more keeping the player on the edge of their seat trying to get to the end of the story. 

I have my own suspect, for the sake of the story I could not choose my true choice where I stopped, that was a bit frustrating as the player and that did dim my interest a bit to continue, just thought the emotional feedback would be important. 

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Thank you for streaming my VN!

Since I originally made the demo as part of a game jam, I had it start in the middle of the story when the string of murders begins. This is so demo readers could jump into the mystery instead of wallowing through the setup. The setup will be focused on the Slice-of-Life side of the characters and story, so the professor will get screen time then. That might mean I have to adjust the trial scene after adding the setup to highlight the importance of the professor like you said, but I think I might rewrite the trial scene in its entirety anyway and figure out how to either prioritize more emotional investment or make it shorter. But currently, I wish to write the rest of this route before I write the setup.

The vote between Cecil and Frederich will impact further murders, which means that point will branch out to two major paths. As of now I am focusing on writing only one of those paths so far. As for not being able to choose a third option, that will be unlocked once the two other paths are completed. Perhaps I should give the MC the option to vote for the doctor but give it a lock symbol to show the choice is possible but only under certain conditions. That might decrease the reader's frustration if they want to vote for the doctor.

Again, thank you for streaming it! Let me know what you think of the rest of the VN once you have the chance!

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I think a fake choice will help, what you can do is give a choice to have the MC try to argue the doc is a suspect and get shut down and have to pick the 2 other choices, then drop a hint immediately to player that they can have the path open up again later when MC gather more evidence. I was seeing the possibility of it leading there with the 2 choices, but it's still hard as first time player to want to get through to it without being able to voice myself. Also glad to know there is a setup before leading to this part.