Very punky, I like it. The blow by blow did take up a lot of space, that could have been used to establish the jackal. That would've cut out a nicely choreographed fight though, so I'm okay with that.
Yeah the jackal as a character was almost an afterthought and I just tried to flesh him out at least a tiny bit when I realized that I hadn't really mentioned him at all. The way to get to him was definitely the priority.
