I would have liked to give it a little more depth, but I ran up exactly to the word limit (had to prune from over 1300 words to get down to exactly 1000). Was there any specific part you feel should have been expanded? Would love to hear your thoughts!
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This is just me, but I felt like I knew I had a good image of the beastman, but you had about 600 words of description and scene setting before that dialogue beins and the plot began to move apace. I think potentially you could have pulled back a bit on some of the description and blended it in with the dialogue. That conversation paints a pretty vivid image of the characters as well. I think I would have liked to see more of the characters shown through them interacting with each other, your world shown through that interplay - something sitting just beneath that let your audience read into the world.
Its never said in the story but to me the Barrister reads as a 'holier than thou' person who is looking down on his captor, unlike Yak’Dul who might be but isn't showing it as the scene opens - two opposing philosophies with room for interpretation. I always like it when an author gives me space to fill in the blanks, and here is a great example of it. Just my two cents but hope it helps.