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This is just me, but I felt like I knew I had a good image of the beastman, but you had about 600 words of description and scene setting before that dialogue beins and the plot began to move apace.  I think potentially you could have pulled back a bit on some of the description and blended it in with the dialogue.  That conversation paints a pretty vivid image of the characters as well.  I think I would have liked to see more of the characters shown through them interacting with each other, your world shown through that interplay - something sitting just beneath that let your audience read into the world. 


Its never said in the story but to me the Barrister reads as a 'holier than thou' person who is looking down on his captor, unlike Yak’Dul who might be but isn't showing it as the scene opens - two opposing philosophies with room for interpretation.  I always like it when an author gives me space to fill in the blanks, and here is a great example of it.  Just my two cents but hope it helps.