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This was a great exploration of the value of intelligence (artificial or otherwise!) applied, at least on two levels. I'm not sure where the strength came into it though.

As a story it was delightful, taking some traditional and stereotypical interaction and twisting them around just enough to keep things engaging. You establish the characters of LEGION and Barkish very deftly, and they're fun to watch bounce off each other. I thought the ending felt a little squashed. It definately needed more than a paragraph to stretch its legs (although I'm not sure what you cut to get there, because word count, amiright?) The other note I had was that the transitions between viewpoints were very sudden and jarring, coming as they did in the middle of paragraphs. Some formatting changes, or other visual cues that we're changing perspective, would have added clarity there.