I adore this story. I love the concept of pre-manufactural cultures being exposed to space age technology, and the idea of a spaceship AI guiding evolution to favor curiosity and ingenuity is a really cool means for a scavenger species to develop. There were a couple points where it was a little difficult to track the flow of the script, but that is very minor. Well done!

I adore this story. I love the concept of pre-manufactural cultures being exposed to space age technology, and the idea of a spaceship AI guiding evolution to favor curiosity and ingenuity is a really cool means for a scavenger species to develop. There were a couple points where it was a little difficult to track the flow of the script, but that is very minor. Well done!

I’m interested to see if OPR actually makes this story canonical.

Quite enjoyed it, even if it didn’t do the best job following the theme.

This is a really great story that speculates on lore so well, combining 2 factions in such a great way. It is a very unique and cool piece that was thoroughly enjoyable to read and made use of interesting perspective shifts. The theme could maybe have been a bit stronger, and some editing to make the flow between perspectives could make it a little easier to read, but overall I really liked this.

This was a great exploration of the value of intelligence (artificial or otherwise!) applied, at least on two levels. I'm not sure where the strength came into it though.

As a story it was delightful, taking some traditional and stereotypical interaction and twisting them around just enough to keep things engaging. You establish the characters of LEGION and Barkish very deftly, and they're fun to watch bounce off each other. I thought the ending felt a little squashed. It definately needed more than a paragraph to stretch its legs (although I'm not sure what you cut to get there, because word count, amiright?) The other note I had was that the transitions between viewpoints were very sudden and jarring, coming as they did in the middle of paragraphs. Some formatting changes, or other visual cues that we're changing perspective, would have added clarity there.

I like the implied origin of the Jackal Faction here, and the Robot Legion connection. The generational manipulation and passage of time showed the patience a machine mind could well be capable of. Good enough to be canon.

Excellent story. 

One of my favorite story's so far! really liked the take on Jackal culture and the OPR lore

Looking foward for LEGION to do more stuff. Great read!

Big fan of this story - the title is hilarious, the premise is imaginative and fresh, and the narrative flows well (especially with establishing character voice)!

Cool story. :) 

Quite the story. The flow and choice of words were jarring at times, but you got the visuals through in the finale.