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Hello!

First off, I would like to say how much I enjoy the game and the characters within (Ruwin and Beisel are my top favs). I could rave about this for a while but I won't because I don't want to waste your time.

I found plenty of spelling mistakes and recorded them for you - unfortunately, I only started noticing/recording them after reaching Brookhaven but here they are! The brackets are my notes, not that I thought you wouldn't figure it out, I just like getting caught up in details. 

I am positively looking forward to the alternative world of Villain's Heart and would happily compile a report like this but I suspect after this, you'll get sick my comments lol

I also found a couple of bugs (not very important, but I couldn't help myself and added them , I'll put those down as a separate post from this.

I used version 1.44 for windows

 Ruwin 3^rd talk, Trade District

Choose 'There is no need'.

True. My Ladyhas a good eye for people [Needs a space]

Lor 2^nd bond talk

Choose 'Everything is fine.'

To order to show our respect to you, [In order to show our respect to you]

It's unworthy of a title. My <name> must be disillusioned with me.  [Must be Lord/Lady]

Lor 3^rd bond talk

Choose 'No one can be calm all the time.'

The interesting thing is the more I accept my weakness, the more comfotable I become. [comfortable]

Lor 4^th bond talk

The members gave unanimously reported high levels of satisfaction with my Lady leadership. [my Lady/Lord's]

Choose 'Wheel of fate?'

Whether you, my Lady lose or gain favour, [missing punctuation - Whether you, my Lady, lose or gain favor]

I can say from my own experience that you have inspired me to aspire to a better mage- [aspire to be a become a better mage]

Katnir 2^nd bond talk

What have I done to earn such a praise? [a is not needed]

Earth Knight, 3^rd bond talk

Choose 'This is a problem.'

When we share food, money and space we must tae extra care to be respectful towards others at all times. [take]

Air Knight 2^nd bond talk

Choice – You need to replaced. [forgot be]

Fire Mage 1^st bond talk

Choose 'For example?'

Long ago, the gods were disatisfied with those with unretrained greed that caused suffering to so many of their creations. [dissatisfied and unrestrained]

Fire Mage 4^th bond talk

Choose 'Haven't read it.'

I see... my Lady very busy of course. [my Lady is very busy]]

Air Mage 4^th bond talk

Choose 'Your team matters'

I need should've understood there is a much bigger picture that I am only a part of. [need seems unnecessary]

Earth Mage 2^nd bond talk

Choose 'Are you moody?'

My Lady knows that we all have a hide range of emotions, correct? [wide instead of hide]

Earth Mage 3^th bond talk

Choose 'I love predictable'

There's nothing more satisfying that a wll executed plan going accordingly, my Lady. [well]

Choose 'It's a balance'

We who are born here, can't hekp but feel affinity towards our own. [help]

Samuel, after battle sewer talk

I assumed the siuation was beneficial to them as well. [situation]

Samuel, sewers talk, talking to Katnir during the 3 silence breaking conversations

To say suggest such an uncouth thing to my Lady-! [say is unnecessary]

Ruwin, exploring sewers

I detest the this wetness, my Lady. It's weighing me down. [this is unnecessary]

Lor, after returning to temple after sewers

We'll need sometime to come up with another plan to keep my Lady safe. [some time, instead of sometime]

Lor, meeting Beileph at bestiary

We must make plans protect my Lady at all costs. [make plans to protect]

Ruwin, after wave 4

At last... It's about time that snivelling coward to make his grand entrance. [It's about time that snivelling coward makes his grand entrance or It's about time for that snivelling coward to make his grand entrance]

Water Knight, 4^th bond talk

Choose 'glad your doing well.'

Thank you, my Ladyfor your caring words. [space]

Water Priest, 1^st bond talk

My intuition has become dull recently and I'm afraid I might be able to perform my priestly duties up to standard. [might not]

Beileph, 1^st bond talk

Choose 'tell me about yourself.'

When I realized that little research has been pursued in regards to that subject matter, I was a vancancy that needed to be filled. [vacancy]

Beileph, 2^nd bond talk

Choose Beasts versus humans

In fact his behavior is so hard wired, they will both adopt themselves into other species groups if left alone. [behaviour]

Choice - 'Why do you want to believe?' [seems like like what do you want to believe?]

'Wipe them out.'

Surely there must be anothe, less severe, solution. [another]

Beileph, 3^rd bond talk

'It seems happy.'

Perhaps my Lady aura is also attractive to beasts? [my Lady/Lord's]

Beisel, 1^st bond talk

I sure hope they are treated you properly! You let me know if they step out of line. [treating you properly]

Beisel, 2^nd bond talk

As leader of the Merchant Guild, I have access to a lot of traded goods. Is there anything your looking for? [anything you're looking for]

Samuel, 2^nd bond talk

Ask why they have to close their eyes

It's best if my Lady is in a neutral state is possible. [is in as neutral a state as possible or is in a neutral state if possible]

Samuel, 3^rd bond talk

Back when the whispered were quieted underground, I assumed my anxiety was due to the environment. [back when  the whispers]

Samuel, 4^th bond talk

Ask for a hug

I'll never wish to make you feel uncomfortable, so please tell me when ever you need a hug from now on. [whenever instead of when ever]

Ruwin, friend talk, choose 'well done/good job'

He nods solemnly but can't fully surpress a creeping smile. [supress]

Ruwin, love talk, ask me anything

Than I can promise you I won't let you be disappointed. [Then I can promise]

We prisoners, often fought amongst ourselves. [punctuation not needed - We prisoners often fought]

Lor, giving oath ring

Would you be willing to meet me there for short hike? [for a short hike]

Samuel, giving oath ring

You must value me more for more than just my loyalty and service, my Lady- [You must value me for more than just...]

And Of course our relationship will mean more than just my fortune telling skills- [Unneeded capital letter]

Samuel, friend talk

Choose try eating some candy

The flavors vary from color to color, tasing vaguely fruity, ranging from mildly sweet to tangy. [tasting]

Choose - ask about candy shape and color

It's not unsual for parents and teachers to make things like to help faciliate conversation. [unusual and facilitate]

This time it's a yellow cup, representing air priest. [representing an air priest]

Choose red sword

Such a combination can be quite domineering by my lady is a hard person to predict. [but my Lady/Lord]

Choose red cup

Such a combination can be contradicting by my lady is also a contradiction in many ways. [same as above]

Katnir, love talk

Choose 'I'll give it to someone else here.'

Shouldn't I just enjoy the comfort of my Lady warmth and let it be at that? [Lady/Lord's]

I would say instead, 'my lady, I'm honored and elated that you think of me that way. [needs a ' on the end]

Beisel, friend talk

Wow! I always saw other girls walking together arm and arm like this- [walking together arm in arm]

(Not necessary to tell you but this scene was adorable and gave me a fuzzy tummy when I 'Aww'ed too hard. I wanted to pat her on the head because all she wanted was a best friend.)

Beisel, giving eternal pendant

Ah, haha! I suddenly feel so embarassed, my <name>. [embarrassed - and end with the name or my Lady/Lord, personally not sure which fits better]

Beisel, love talk

Choose 'Really? Thanks.'

I want to pick out your outfit next. Soemthing for our nest outting together. [something and outing]

You notice that she square is emptying and most of the patrons have moved on. [You notice that the square]

Beileph, love talk

Beileph is stands from his seat and pulls up a chair for you, inviting you to sit with him. [is at beginning of sentence is unnecessary]

Such as the dietarty habits, health concerns, and bowel movements of the beasts. [dietary]

Choose ask about beasts social habits

For instance, even the serpent and arachid can show signs on affection. [show signs of affection]

They will even go as far as to seek them out for the sole person of having companionship. [seek them out for the sole purpose of having companionship]

Choose 'Yes. You are more than your research.

He shurgs, looking very weary. [shrugs]

Even if you are the only one who understand me, I feel like that should be enough. [understands me]

Or where ever your next destination may be. [wherever instead of where ever]

Choose 'What are you thinking about?'

When I try to think of something else, my mind just keeps wander back to my work. [keeps wandering back to my work]