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few more.

gallery.rpy:21326, script3.rpy:3102: langish->languish

script3.rpy:4656, script3.rpy:4670, script2.rpy:5046: iris->Iris

gallery.rpy:8014, gallery.rpy:23098, gallery.rpy:23233, rerun.rpy:1698, script3.rpy:5049, script3.rpy:5185, script.rpy:21653: You pussy->Your pussy

script3.rpy, between lines 5850 and 5950: '28 July', 'July 28', 'June 28th' - pick one date format and use it all the time :) [you most often use <month> <day> but more exceptions exist in other script files. happy hunting]

3x in script.rpy, 2x in script3.rpy: Iris's->Iris'

gallery.rpy:12099, rerun.rpy:2169, script3.rpy:6302: They way->The way

script3:6733 "Instead I convinced her to come with us to the convention." nah, not really :D Iris invited herself and C was at first against it

script3.rpy:6948: mc "Yes, Marcus is away so he wants to take his mind off things." -> 'she' and 'her', MC talks abaout Natacha

script3.rpy:11114: you're->there are

gallery.rpy:12316, script3.rpy:12281: beautifull->beautiful

script3.rpy:12660: ph "Great, I'll sign up tonight."  -> ey! where's the "$ emilie_fans += 1"?!?

"label d34_girl_name" - no remark when chosing Emilie? (and you could extend this a lot, e.g. using Cassandra as boy name. or Nicolas as girl name. or vice-versa. or Emilie's nick name; generally all names existing in the game - probably not worth the effort, but fun for players stumbling over it)

general remark: Emilie is more often than not displayed wearing light-coloured clothes and/or in front of a white(ish) background. I think more contrasting colours around her would bring out her appearance