2 issues I had with your song:
1. Mixing. The first part was audibly clipping. To fix that, instead of making each instrument you add louder, make everything else more quiet, and leave around 3-6db headroom for mixing later on.
2. Just as other people pointed out, the melody sometimes just doesn't go anywhere. You'll definetly improve on it as time goes on, but I recommend looking into period form and sentence form for better melodies.
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Thanks for sharing the issues and the details on how to fix them! I've got some music theory knowledge and typically follow the period form naturally but I'll look into the sentence form, the name doesn't ring a bell.
I really tried to embrace the "no repeating patterns" challenge and brought it into the melodies - true, there are a couple points where it gets lost because of this.
Mixing is a very weak point of mine, I'm still pretty new to producing and I tend to wear multiple hats so I don't always dive as deep into topics as I'd like to - jack of all trades, master of none lol thanks for the pointers here, I'll work on leveling up my mixing - much appreciated!