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This is a good mini visual novel! I do like the overall arc of the storyline but I do wish that the narrator's thoughts were presented more clearly. I think the artstyle matches pretty nicely with the story, though I think that skipping dialogues can have weird side effects with the background and sprites not being loaded at times. I would suggest reducing the number of beep sounds played to once every few letters when the text is being written into the box as it felt very very loud. I think with some polish and revisions to the story this has the potential to be great. Good job!

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Thanks for the feedback @riko! Yes, I do agree! I will revisit the SFX and add few news when the game jam is over. Happy to read you enjoy the story, and I like to know what do you mean with the clearer narrator thoughts.

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I think that while I could understand the narrator's thoughts, I think that it could definitely use with some more depth as it would help me understand Sean as a person better. I understand that they are close to Jacqueline, but I would like to see some sort of conflict in Sean's perception of Jacqueline seeing as she appears to coerce Sean into doing something that they perhaps are not comfortable with (if the player does go down that path). I think that having this conflict arise earlier in the story can help solidify Sean as a character, as they eventually give in to the use of substances and forget about that initial conflict. This is just one possible example, but there are definitely plenty of ways to expand upon the writing of the story.

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Thats a really nice take my friend, I will keep it in mind for future updates, thank you much for the feedback!