Good job! It was a treat to go through, and I think your narration is pretty good. I feel like I understand the choices I'm making well before I make while the story still progresses naturally.
While I like your style, but I think it can be a bit difficult to follow who's talking in a few areas, especially when you have dialogue split apart from the tags. SPOILERS: One such place is around the line where Santana goes “Well, I mean… I’m a grown woman. And it’s kind of… you know…” which might be a mistake since I was under the assumption that Santana was a man and you use he/him pronouns for him even after this line, so then I thought it might have been Paula saying it, but the way the text is formatted doesn't make sense for Paula to be saying it. I hope that makes sense?