Pacy and atmospheric! The narrative took a few unexpected turns and I liked the gradual reveal of the setting :-)

I liked the concept behind this! It was a creepy and interesting situation the main character got into. I do wish the story went a little deeper into the concept or what happens next, but form reading some of the other comments, it seems like you made this in 4 hours! So, definitely, a lot accomplished in a short period of time.

Good job!

Nice! We all love survivor island stories of course, although this one was cut very short indeed. I am also quite confused about why the killers were so happy to have her shoot him and escape? Confuses me a little bit.

Also, and I know this isn't the point of the story, but it seems clear to me that these heavily armed thugs ought to keep prisoners instead of killing them outright - just for purely mathematical purposes. Math:

- Evil Killer (21 days left)
- Prisoner (Caught at 7 Days in, x days left.)
--> Kill immediately -> if no other prisoners are caught, Killer leaves in 14 days.
--> Keep prisoner for 7 days (now 'worth' 14 days, Killer has 14 days left) & then kill -> 14-14 = 0 -> Killer leaves immediately (=after 7 days, not 14).

This isn't a criticism per say, because it actually allows for better stories as the killers would have an incentive not to just murder people outright (provided they are 'fresh' enough, of course), but just an observation re: the system.

This was interesting! Different playthroughs gave me the opportunity to learn more about the world and characters which was cool. 

Good job! It was a treat to go through, and I think your narration is pretty good. I feel like I understand the choices I'm making well before I make while the story still progresses naturally.

While I like your style, but I think it can be a bit difficult to follow who's talking in a few areas, especially when you have dialogue split apart from the tags. SPOILERS: One such place is around the line where Santana goes “Well, I mean… I’m a grown woman. And it’s kind of… you know…” which might be a mistake since I was under the assumption that Santana was a man and you use he/him pronouns for him even after this line, so then I thought it might have been Paula saying it, but the way the text is formatted doesn't make sense for Paula to be saying it. I hope that makes sense?

A fairly linear game where only the last choice actually matters and decides the ending for this version of the story, meaning interactivity is not a strong point. The narration on the other hand, is. It smoothly transitions from the shop to the "dream" or Surviland, without making it feel jarring or disjointed. 

For a game made in less than a day, it's fairly well done.

the transition into the "dream" was really smooth, and it ended at the right time, which is hard to do imo

A lot of mystery still about the island, Santana, and Paula's past. I can see the backstory with David definitely weaving its way to the story. It's linear at the moment, I tried a couple of playthroughs which lead to two possible endings. It's interesting! Who was the guy she bumped into? Did the objects in the shop have some significance? Hmmmm

Very creepy, I enjoyed it a lot! It event felt uncanny since my name is Paula