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So, I found your writing quite good from a technical level, but I ran out of suspension of disbelief when two armies that were literally in the act of fighting suddenly decide to be friends instead. Unlikely allies is a good thing, but unplausible allies requires more work on your part to help me accept.

Yeah, I am honestly not satisfied with the story I did not realize how little a story a thousand words was when I sat down. I ended up writing almost 2000 and had to cut half the story. Almost ran out of time, I'll be ready next time. Thank you for the critique.