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Well written and great concepts. You gave the characters a sense of depth, helped in no small part by the interaction between Arrago and Beras. One thing I noticed was an overabundance of adjectives and adverbs. This might just be a personal preference thing, so take it with a grain of salt, but if the story had been a little more sparse with its descriptors, it would've made the times they really needed to be used for emphasis really pop. Again, could be a personal preference thing, in which case rock on. Solid story though, job well done.