I narrated your short here;

the opening is absolutely amazing and honestly this concept seems almost what the theme was made for, great read. 

Well written and great concepts. You gave the characters a sense of depth, helped in no small part by the interaction between Arrago and Beras. One thing I noticed was an overabundance of adjectives and adverbs. This might just be a personal preference thing, so take it with a grain of salt, but if the story had been a little more sparse with its descriptors, it would've made the times they really needed to be used for emphasis really pop. Again, could be a personal preference thing, in which case rock on. Solid story though, job well done.

The story flows well, and i really liked the focus on space warfare 

An old enemy is like an old friend... I like some of the details used here, such as animating iron shavings to represent holographic projections or the 'boarding nails' sub for assault ram/boarding torpedoes.

I really liked this one. Love the world building and the flow

I really liked the conversation between Arrago and Beras. It was an engaging way to established their history while keeping the story moving.

I love to see anything that helps differentiate OPR from 40k, and I think the way you used Havoc Brothers in this story is a perfect example. I really enjoyed the small drips of Arrago and Beras's past as well, and the thing that would have really elevated this story for me is expanding on that. I think you could have spent fewer words on establishing the battle and its stakes, and used that space to really let their tense relationship shine.

I cared for Captain Arrago. He seems like a good dynamic character. Beras’ was a good foil to him. Using havoc brothers against battle brothers is a good idea that seems underutilized. I commend you for using battle brothers; it is a hard faction to write about. The TV thing made of iron filings was a fun idea. It was slightly confusing who they were being attacked by in the first part of the story but cleared up by the end. 

Well done! This was really well written and a good use of the theme.

Hopefully we learn more of the relationship between Arrago and Beras in future writing jams.

I really, really like the story. The presented themes are captured very well and the two main characters are convincing.

I had a little problems finding my bearing within the first paragraph, as I didn't immediately understood who was fighting whom and on which scale (ammount of ships involved).

After I found my bearings the story impressed me!