Understandable, I figured it was part of a larger narrative. I think if you had even just a few hundred more words to work with, say 1500 total, the theme would've shone through no problem. Like I said, solid writing and story telling though.
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I appreciate the honest opinion and am glad you liked it overall. I have an overarching them in mind and plan to continue to write towards it in coming jams. Jam #8 started the Blackvayne saga and #9 was a prequel so they are essentially out of order. I am thinking #10 will be in the same saga but something different than what I've done thus far. People will love it or hate it and that's okay by me.